This is Sumire.
I looked for Japanese wedding rate. Japan was ranked 9.
There are ways to meet person, but it's this rank.
HERE I found a marriage that is mentioned about difference. United states are the country that is strongest. Japan are heavier than what you think. Japan has their religion for wedding. Wedding that is considered place, money, and will. What you think and wedding are not simple. Talk over and when it come to decision, wedding gets what you want it to be. Wedding is long distance. At the place is where to go and it is your partner.
This is incomprehensible. I cannot follow it.
ReplyDeleteMs. MacGregor
This is Ms. MacGregor
ReplyDeleteFirst of all, can you spell marriage correctly in your title? It gives a bad impression right from the start!
And you should express the idea of "late" more clearly - you mean "when they are older than before."
You wrote: "At the time, 2000, the average age at first marriage for both men and women was very high."
Compared to when? You should give historical data to put these figures into perspective. This is a poor introduction.
BTW, what is the source of the data?
It is not "cause of late marriage" - it is "reasons for late marriage."
Next, you wrote, " The third one is what can be done to prevent marriage in the future." What can be caused to prevent marriage? Why do you want to stop people from getting married?
Do you have data for this?:
"Recently the number of women who put back a marriage in consideration of work has increased."
You have to prove that the child allowance is insufficient.
The problems with your logic and lack of data continue through the paper. Many revisions are needed to make this a useful research report.
p.s. Are they no advantages to late marriage?
And last, many Japanese students write like this:
As we wrote so far, late marriage is one of the most serious problems in Japan and all over the world today
Certainly there are more serious problems in the world - think about war, famine, political unrest. Not reasonable.